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Thursday, 23 February 2017

The sky

this is my story



The sky.
Is blue pink and yellow .
The sun
Is big and yellow.
The sky
It rains too in the sky.
The strs are the moons tridin the sun is big and yellow i love it

14 comments:

  1. Good effort Lachlan. You have thought of some cool colours that are in the sky. I like that you included rain in your story. Next time you might like to see if you can correct some of your spelling using spell check. If you ask me in class I can help you with this.

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  2. Hi my name is bailey i like your work i like your fall stops lachian you have do a good job keep it up.

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  4. Hi Lachlan it's Hunter from Rata class, I like your post because you have said that you like the sun, because I like the sun to. It reminds me of the last time of was in Australia, It is really, really hot in Australia. I spotted a spelling mistake. What is strs.

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  5. Hello Lachlan I like the blog post about the sky. I like the sky and sun. Maybe you should spellcheck the post. Goodbye Lachlan!

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  6. Hi Lachlan this is Mikayla k from Rata,I like how you did your work.keep trying to check your work to see if it is right or wrong.But I still really like it,Bye Bye.

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  7. Hey lachlan, I'm not your friend but... Congratulations! you are blogger of the week! I liked the way you made every single post!
    Did you think about making 20 posts? Did you make a surpise ending or a surprise start? Have fun replying to the other comments! Fenix out.

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  8. Hi it Is Dani here nice job Lachlan did to you try to spell star or am i wrong but nice try with all your spelling.Next time ask the teacher how to spell the words or sound it up your writing is awesome keep on writing your work is awesome!!! soo cool dude bye dude!!!

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  9. Hello lachlan, it is Elijescha in Rata.
    I like the pome it is wandefel!
    Did you now if the sun moves a inch closer, the sun wont be not that nise it will rost us all! but if the sun moves a inch father then the world will fris to death! :(
    mady next time you can put your name with.















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  10. Hi my name is kaunteya.That's a really good poem and i really like how you us about the sky all of those words were just amazing.my favourite bit was when you said the sky is all of those colours.
    Maybe you should go and another look at the sky and get some more views.

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  11. Hi,it's Dion.I really like

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  12. I like how you decibed the sky can you do it agen for ays

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  13. Hi its keisha here
    YOU NEED TO FIX SPELLING PLEASE
    But I do like it.
    When you did this were you in a hurry?
    From Keisha

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  14. You had a great idea here. You really thought about the sky and you tgried to express yourself how you felt about it. It is a hard tyo express what is in yourhead but you had a great try. Keep going.

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